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Dick Davis, "On NOT Translating Hafez"

A couple of years ago I was asked by a publisher if I would be interested in producing a volume of verse translations of the poems of Hafez
- I was very pleased to be asked, since Hafez (he flourished in the mid-14-th century)
- is pretty universally regarded as the greatest of Persian lyric poets,
- and to produce versions of his poems seemed a serious challenge worthy of serious effort.
- I began trying my hand at a few, but rewrite and start over as I might,
- I consistently came up with generally disappointing results.

All the problems I had encountered, when trying to translate other medieval Persian poets seemed compounded

- and then, as it were, distilled and essentialized,
- in trying to translate Hafez's ghazals,
- and my frustration set me to thinking about
- just what those problems are?

This essay is a result of those ruminations

Two kinds of problems for the translator of a literary text are well-recognized
- & these we may call, for convenience's sake:
1. the linguistic &
2. the cultural

- naturally, they often overlap.

1. The linguistic problem is the easiest to formulate
- We know that exact synonyms do not exist between languages;
- idioms are even more challenging to the translator &
- a literal word-for-word translation will often convey virtually nothing of the originally intended meaning.

Persian, for example, has some extremely inventive ways — one might almost call them Gongoristic — of cursing or threatening people

- and a literal translation will convey very little of their intended force.
- One such locution means literally, "I will bring your father out,"
- a threat that seems at once mysterious and reassuringly mild in its implications.
- What it actually means is:
- "I will give you one hell of a hard time
- (either because you have already done X, or if you don't in the future do Y)"
- Various origins for the phrase have been suggested,
- the most plausible perhaps being that it means:
- "I will give you such a hard time
- that your father will rise up out of his grave in consternation."
- Clearly, to translate the phrase — for example, as part of a character's speech in a novel
- one can only abandon literal translation altogether and search instead for some threat
- that carries equivalent force and menace in the target language.

Similarly, puns can rarely be translated

- only in English can one make Sidney Smith's joke on 2 housewives yelling at each other from opposite houses:
- "They will never agree, for they are arguing from different premises"
- Only in the Romance languages do love and death — l’amore e la morte, l’amour et la mort
- seem to be on terms of such ghostly intimacy.
- Only in Persian will the pun in the medieval poet Masud Sad’s line:
- "Nalam bedel chu nai man andar hesar-e nai" be evocative:
- the pun is on the word "nai", which means "a reed",
- and by extension a reed flute, and also alludes to the name of a fortress used as a prison.
- Hence the line means "While I am (imprisoned) in nai (the fortress), I complain in my heart like a nai (reed flute)."

Like the use of puns, rhyme too is a device, that depends on accidents of sound
- that "breath" and "death" rhyme in English can seem somehow cosmically right to the unreflective English poet,
- but of course words for the concepts they express don't rhyme in other languages.
- A brief rhymed phrase can sum up a whole ethos and way of life:
- like the "razm o bazm" (roughly, "battles and banquets" / "fighting and feasting") of the epic poet Ferdowsi, for example
- and it is virtually certain that no translator will be able to reproduce the meaning as pithily and inclusively by any rhyme in another language.
- Paucity of rhyme can have its effect, too;
- because it has more vowel sounds than either Italian or Persian,
- English is to that extent poor in rhymes compared to either language.
- How many English would-be lyric poets have cursed the fact - that the only rhymes available to them for "love" are:
--- the overused "dove" and "above,"
--- the irrelevant "glove,"
--- the impossible "shove," and
--- the phonetically dubious "of"?
- "Self" and "world," both words that can seem inevitable in lyric verse,
--- present even more intractable problems as rhyme words.

Accidents of sound — such as those found in puns and rhymes — are of course particularly important to poetry

- many of the effects, of which are based on repetitions or variations of sound patterns
- and the difficulties of a translator of poetry are thereby increased.

2. The next obvious problem faced by a translator inheres in those parts of a text, which have clear cultural resonance
- for the original audience but
- very little or absolutely no resonance for the linguistic community of the target language

An obvious example of this for translators from almost any Persian text from the 16-th century on

- is the lore of Shia Islam,
- an intimate knowledge of the main features of which is automatically assumed by most post-15-th-century Persian authors,
- though this is of course a knowledge almost entirely lacking in the linguistic communities of the West.
- When we turn to Persian poetry, such cultural problems can be particularly intrusive.

There is the fact, that after the 13-th century, virtually all Persian poetry has at least a tinge of Sufism to it
- if it is not outrightly mystical in intent,
- and mysticism is not a subject accorded particular importance by the poetry of the major Western languages.
- True, Dante is a major Italian poet,
--- but he is remembered more for the terribilità of the Inferno
--- than for the mysticism of the Paradiso, and besides
--- he is an anomaly, a uniquely splendid and solitary figure in Italian literature.
- The best mystical poet England can boast is probably Crashaw,
--- who by any ranking is a very minor poet indeed.
- Dr. Johnson said: he thought the notion of good religious poetry to be a contradiction in terms.
- When a reader, who has grown up in the tradition of English verse, picks up a book of poetry,
--- he does not expect to encounter mysticism or religious dogma;
--- he does not consider either to be the obvious subject for verse in the way that his Persian counterpart does.
--- The language of religious or mystical devotion does not appear to him to be intrinsically poetic, as it does to a Persian reader.

A subdivision of this mystical problem is the set of ideas metaphorically expressed in Persian poetry

- by wine, drunkenness, the opposition of the rend (approximately "libertine") and the zahed ("ascetic"), and so forth.
- None of these notions have any force whatsoever in the Western literary tradition.
- It would never occur to a Western poet, to express the forbidden intoxications of mysticism by alluding to the forbidden intoxications of wine,
- for the simple fact that the intoxications of wine have never been forbidden in the West
- (if we exclude the brief and local moment of prohibition in the United States).
- The whole topos of winebibbing & the flouting of sober outward convention, so dear to Persian Sufi poetry,
- can seem in earlier translators’ work to be little more than a kind of rowdy undergraduate hijinks,
- and in more recent versions, it can take on the ethos of Haight-Ashbury in the late 60-es.
- But in both cases the deeper resonances of the topos are not obvious for a Western audience:
- they have to be explained — and to explain a resonance is like explaining a joke;
- when the explanation is over, no one laughs, except out of pained politeness, and no one is moved.

A further cultural barrier, and one that can prove particularly difficult to negotiate, is
the prevalence of the cult of pederasty in much medieval Persian verse

- Sometimes it exists simply in and for itself,
- but often it is present chiefly as a metaphorical expression of mysticism.
- Like the mysticism, to which it often refers, this too has never been a serious mainstream subject in Western verse,
- and although it is clearly taken casually and conventionally in a great deal of Persian medieval poetry,
- its presence - a major problem for the translator, who has no equivalent set of conventions in the target language, in which to place the topos.
- Here he is helped by Persian grammar and its lack of gender-specific pronouns
- (the same pronoun means "he," "she," or "it"),
- but in availing himself of this help he is, as he knows, often fudging the issue, quietly bowdlerizing the texts.
- And our contemporary relative celebration of homosexuality hardly facilitates matters,
- as the kind of homosexuality implicit in Persian medieval verse is,
- like that usually present in ancient Greek literature,
- between an older man and a young adolescent, one, who would now be thought of as a minor,
- and is not of a kind that the West currently considers culturally acceptable.

- The pervasive presence of mysticism & its attendant rhetoric of metaphorical drunkenness, together with
- the cult of pederasty

- are the 2 most obvious purely cultural problems,
- that a translator of medieval Persian poetry must inevitably face.

But the problems I have mentioned so far, are often also present for the translator of prose

- even if they can be more insistently obvious in verse.
- There is, however, an additional set of problems specific to the translation of verse,
- and it is these problems that I wish to consider.
- They have to do with notions of what a poem ultimately does and how it does it,
- and such notions often differ radically from one linguistic community to another.
- The conventions that particularly interest me here, are not the most obvious ones, regarding how a poem is patterned.
- There are many sound and semantic patterns in Persian verse, that are absent or uncommon in English verse,
- but which, while they can be tricky, do not provide insurmountable difficulties.

For example, dialogue poems that have alternating lines beginning “I said”/ “(s)he said” (“goftam”/ “gofta”)

- do not exist in English,
- but the convention is easily reproducible in English;
- it does not violate English language notions of how a poem might be constructed.
- Similarly the "radif" of Persian verse — the repeated phrase, that comes after each repetition of a rhyme

Here is a 12-th century woman poet Mahsati
The one your beauty's overthrown
has come back home;
The one who thirsts for you alone
has come back home;
Prepare the cage again, scatter your seeds
of kindness there,
Look, broken-winged, the bird you own
has come back home.

Even mono-rhyme, used in virtually all poems in Persian

- except for narratives (which use couplets) — a feature difficult and consequently - rare in English
- because of the relative paucity of rhymes
- does not seem too egregious, if it can be made compelling and suggestive.
- While such conventions may be unfamiliar, an English poem does not seem compromised
- as an aesthetic artifact simply by virtue of their presence.

But the real problem,
in my opinion, lies not in such manifest, mechanical conventions</i>
- but rather in the conventions that exist, as it were, just below the conscious level;
- they are not conventions as to how a poem is explicitly patterned so much as conventions as
- to which language, topoi, and tropes are considered to be intrinsically poetic and thus - suitable for poetry.
People of a particular linguistic community often automatically assume, that their notion of what constitutes the “poetic” is a universal notion

- and this can lead to a sense of disappointment or embarrassment
- when they are confronted with highly praised artifacts from another culture
- and these artifacts do not conform to local aesthetic expectations;
- the end result of this can be, and I think often is, a smug sense
- openly expressed by the crass, privately believed by the more circumspect — that really only “our” literature is any good.

A very obvious example from Persian poetry concerns the use of the language of panegyric

- for virtually all types of poetic expression,
- and particularly for the expression of emotions associated with the lyric.
- Panegyric in itself hardly exists, as a respectable form, in English verse.
--- This is not to say that panegyrics have not been written,
--- but they have rarely been valued as especially interesting poetry,
--- and they have always, in English, smacked of undignified fawning,
--- as if they were the kind of thing that no “real” poet would want to be involved with.
--- Probably the only panegyric in English that is still considered to be a major poem is Marvell's “An Horatian Ode upon Cromwell's Return from Ireland”
--- and this is valued largely because the inserted implied praise of Cromwell's arch-enemy, King Charles I,
--- appears to subvert, and certainly complicates, the overt panegyric format.
--- We can say that panegyric lives a kind of shadowy half-life in many elegies,
--- but it has certainly never been a mainstream English form,
--- and the language and ethos of panegyric have never been considered ipso facto poetic.
- Matters were quite different in medieval Persia:
--- where panegyric was an extremely important form.
--- The distinguished scholar of medieval Persian poetry J.T.P. De Bruijn has shrewdly compared it to the tradition of court portraiture in the West,
--- and this strikes me as an excellent analogy,
--- as regards both its position within the culture & what the authors working within the tradition were trying to do with it.
--- The rhetoric of praise poetry pervades medieval Persian verse
--- even when the subject has ostensibly nothing to do with panegyric.
--- Unless the work is meant as satire, it can be taken as virtually axiomatic that
--- the speaker of a non-narrative Persian poem places himself in an inferior position to the poem’s subject,
--- whether the poem directly addresses the subject as a “you” or refers to the subject in the third person.

--- This axiomatic superiority of the subject is present in political praise poetry,
--- from which it would seem to derive, in love poetry, and in mystical poetry.
--- So pervasive is the notion in Persian verse that it is, I would guess,
--- considered to be intrinsically poetic by most Persian speakers.
--- But this rhetoric is in fact culture-specific;
--- it seems to be generally absent, for example, in poetry of the Far East - in Chinese or Japanese or Korean poetry.

--- And though extravagant praise of the other, and a concomitant self-abasement, can at times be found in English poetry,
--- these elements of perspective are not considered intrinsically poetic in the way that they are in Persian;

Other strategies — for example psychological realism, concreteness of language, originality of imagery

- (all of which are virtually always irrelevant criteria for pre-20-th-century Persian verse)
- are considered equally or even more “poetic” in English.

Out of this given of classical Persian poetry, that the speaker of the poem is customarily to present himself as inferior to the poem’s addressee,
other conventions arise.

1. There is the use of hyperbole

- particularly in descriptions of the addressee.
- So poetic is this considered to be in Persian, that
- the ironic term “sha’eraneh” (“poetic”) is often used to describe such language found in a non-poetic context.
- Hyperbole, of course, exists in English poetry, but
--- not nearly to the extent that it does in Persian poetry, and
--- indeed there is a strong, mainstream current of English verse that derides it:
--- “My mistress’ eyes are nothing like the sun,” as Shakespeare says,
--- he concludes the sonnet with which this line opens by mocking what he calls “false compare,” i.e., hyperbole of description.
- The most extreme examples of such hyperbolic praise are to be found in the trope called “hosn-e talil,”
--- or beauty of etiology, in which a complimentary, but entirely fanciful cause is found for a natural phenomenon.

--- Hosn-e talil is greatly prized in Persian and is virtually nonexistent in English poetry,
--- as is indicated by the fact that there is no common term for the trope in English.
--- Indeed, I have been able to find only one true example of it in an English poem.
--- Significantly enough, the example I did find, which is at the opening of Milton’s “Ode on the Morning of Christ's Nativity,”
--- is there to praise Christ; that is, the poem’s divine subject,
--- in Milton’s eyes, justifies the hyperbole.
--- But for a mere mortal hosn-e ta’lil seems not so much poetic as unnatural in English.

2. Here then we come to a major problem, which is that the appearance of a set of strategies considered intrinsically poetic in Persian

- the inferiority of the speaker,
- praise of the addressee,
- the use of hosn-e talil as part of this praise
- is relatively rare in English poetry,
- is not considered intrinsically poetic, and
- can be seen as unnatural or absurd.
- In fact, one might say that the Persian and English sensibilities here make directly opposing demands of verse:
- the more extreme the praise, the more poetic the poem is considered to be in Persian, and
- the closer to absurdity and distasteful flattery it is considered to be in English.

3. Other tropes besides hosn-e talil that are considered legitimate and valuable in Persian poetry are suspect in English poetry

- The more cerebral quality of Persian metaphors when compared to their English equivalents
- can mean that a Persian metaphor can fail in English (and vice versa, of course).
- For example, to say that a lover has wasted away to the thinness of a hair is not uncommon in Persian verse;
- this is because the comparison is made cerebrally not concretely.
- But the English reaction to such a metaphor is to attempt to visualize it,
- and physical reality will not allow one to visualize a lover as thin as a hair;
- the metaphor doesn’t work in English.
- Persian abstracts the quality isolated by the metaphor (here, thinness) and
- chooses a vehicle that expresses this quality in extremis (in this case, a hair);
- the procedure is normal and appropriate in Persian,
- but a reader used to the concreteness of English metaphor tries to visualize the result, with very uncomfortable consequences.

4. A further example of how rhetoric is differently conceived of in Persian and English is the mixed metaphor
- To refer to a person as a walking cypress tree (sarv-e raven)
- is only absurd in English, and implies none of the delicacy, charm, and wonder that accompany the phrase in Persian.
- There is a literalism about English metaphor, which strongly resists the mixed metaphor and labels it as a mistake of taste.
- The mixed metaphor of the “walking cypress” type is, however, prized in Persian.
- The reason for this, I think, has to do with another convention,
- that indicates where English and Persian verse, and literature in general, diverge;
- this convention concerns which emotions are thought of as particularly poetic or interesting.

We have already mentioned by implication the emotion of a sense of abjection and unworthiness before the object of praise;
equally common in Persian poetry, and often connected with this sense of self-abnegation, are
5. emotions of wonder, surprise, amazement, bewilderment,

- and so forth.
- Persian poetry is full of words that express this aesthetic of wonder and amazement.
- What is unexpected, unnatural, miraculous, producing puzzled or overwhelmed wonder in the observer, is, ipso facto, considered poetic.
- Even when perfectly natural phenomena are described — the verdure of spring, for example
- they tend to be described within the rhetoric of this aesthetic,
- implying that their splendor raises them above the expected and credible.
- This idealization of reality, and the calling forth of emotions like wonder and astonishment,
- which are seen as reactions to unprecedented perfection, are again relatively rare in the English poetic tradition,
- which frequently tends toward the specific and idiosyncratic,
- and which looks for the flash of recognition in the reader rather than amazed wonder at an ideal,
- which is remote from quotidian experience.
- The aesthetic of wonder leads to specific topoi common to Persian verse
- for instance, the notion of beauty that is "shahr-ashub" (“setting the town in an uproar”
- i.e., provoking such wonder in everyone)
- that have no equivalents in English.
- Perhaps one can most simply characterize the difference of aesthetic involved here by quoting Hamlet's advice to the players,
- when he says that the purpose of playing is:
- “to hold, as 'twere, the mirror up to nature; to show... the very age and body of the time his form and pressure,”
- and then comparing this with the 11-th century poet Ayyuqi’s description of what it is that a poet does:
- he says a poet is like the woman who beautifies a bride before her wedding ceremony.
- For Shakespeare, art’s job is to show reality, warts and all, as it were;
- for Ayyuqi, art’s job is to make reality appear as lovely and splendid as possible.

Connected with this concern with amazed wonder, and subject matter that can be relied on to provoke this wonder is,
6. Persian poetry’s frequent invocation of the ineffable and indescribable
- this is most common in mystical poetry, of course, but
- it is also present in secular love poetry
- where the injunction “Don't ask!” (“ma-pors”), a favorite of Hafez and
- subsequently of any number of other poets,
- can imply either heights or depths of incommunicable experience.
- The concrete empiricism of most English verse means that it spends little time on the ineffable, and
- to imply that something is indescribable in English
- does not carry the inevitable implication that it is therefore interesting;
- there is not a rhetoric, readily available in English,
- for talking around and hinting toward what cannot be directly stated.

The sense of the ineffable, or of amazed wonder, reinforces a further characteristic of Persian verse,
which separates it from the English poetic tradition and so makes the translator’s task that much more difficult.
7. This is the way, in which lyric poetry in Persian often appears static:
- in that the typical method of procedure is to restate a problem or insight in different terms,
- with each successive line.
- Or as the scholar Wojciech Skalmowski has recently characterized it:
- “short sequences of verses or... single bayts (lines) allude to various aspects of the same universe of discourse
- within which the ‘action’ of the whole genre is situated and
- which is assumed to be known in advance by the... audience.”
- This thematic coherence but narrative or logical disjunctiveness is evidenced by the fact
- that different manuscripts of, say, Hafez will give the same lines of a ghazal,
- but in varying sequences;
even leaving aside questions of rhyme scheme,
- it is very difficult to imagine the lines of a Shakespearean sonnet appearing in different order in different manuscripts,
- because the poem’s forward motion makes it plain, which parts come before or after others.
- A small by-product of this situation is that in a ghazal a person can be addressed as “you” in one line
- and then apparently the same person will be referred to as “(s)he” in another line;
- the discrete status of the individual lines makes this perfectly acceptable.
- This is hardly possible in an English poem,
- where the natural assumption would be that a “you” and a “she” (or “he”) appearing in the same poem clearly must refer to different people.

8. The typical (though not universal) lack of a sense of forward impetus in the Persian ghazal,
is reinforced considerably by the aesthetic of wonder, which seems to militate against the logical development of a subject
- Thus, if one compares a Shakespeare sonnet with a Hafez ghazal, for example,
- the most obvious difference in terms of content is that:
- the psychological situation at the end of a Shakespeare sonnet is almost always different from what it had been at the beginning,
- whereas in a Hafez ghazal the irresolvableness, the resistance to development or resolution, and therefore
- the lack of closure of the situation seem to be an intrinsic part of the poem’s point.

- Ghazals often seem to end with the literary equivalent of throwing one’s hands in the air,
- as if nothing can be done about the situation the poem describes:
- recognizing that there is no end to the situation is what constitutes the end of the poem.
- This sense of being psychologically becalmed in an undeveloping and undevelopable situation
- probably arises initially from the fact that this poetry was meant to be heard rather than read silently and privately

9. Most such poetry it resolutely avoids enjambment
- In so doing it utilizes lines that are almost always semantically complete,
- that do not derive from a preceding line or imply a following line.
- The semantic separateness of each line within an overall mono-rhymed structure
- produces an artifact not unlike that of a musical theme and variations:
- each line is a discrete variation that is nevertheless tied closely to the overall theme,
- which is usually stated most succinctly in the opening or closing line.
- The mono-rhyme formally confirms that we always in a sense end where we begin,
- that psychological “development” from one stage to another is not, normally, what is being attempted or presented.
- This is not at all to derogate from the aesthetic authority of the poems, and
- I would not wish a reader to think that this is what I am implying.
- One has only to think of the overwhelming pathos and power of a piece like Bach’s C-minor passacaglia, or
- the poignancy of the return of the opening theme at the end of his Goldberg Variations
- to recognize how artistically effective such a form, and such devices operating within the form, can be.
- Many of Hafez’s ghazals can certainly provide an equivalent and equally profound aesthetic experience.

10. Naturally, too, exceptions can be found

- that would contradict my characterization of them
- as typically, in form, constituting the statement of a theme and subsequent variations,
- just as there are sonnets, in which there is no development or change in the speaker’s implied psychological state,
- which may remain exactly the same at the end as at the beginning

Nevertheless, the characterization is, I think, a defensible one,
for probably the vast majority of examples of the Persian ghazal.
It seems accurate, therefore, to say that:
11. these purely mechanical characteristics (mono-rhyme, a lack of enjambment)
- have had consequences that reinforce the poetry’s very specific aesthetic,
- one that only loosely, and as it were accidentally, corresponds to Western expectations of how the experience of a lyric poem unfolds.

12. Certain poets are held to be untranslatable
, or virtually so,
- and often they are thought of as those that most intimately express the poetic soul of their people:
--- in Russian there is Pushkin;
--- in German, Goethe;
--- in Persian, Hafez.
- The fact that it is often precisely the poets:
--- who seem to sum up a poetry’s idiosyncratic potential and identity,
--- who are those, whose works are most resistant to translation
- can give rise to a kind of romantic, quasi-racial canonization of such poets,
--- an implication that they cannot be translated, because
--- what they express draws so deeply on the culture's specific ethnic soul
--- that it is not communicable in any other terms.

- This is a variant of the sentimental “To understand, my friend, you have to be Persian/Jewish/Russian...” ploy.
--- (Against this ethnic self-indulgence there is a lovely story
--- of Franco Corelli asking Richard Tucker for tips on how to sing Puccini?
--- “Well,” began Tucker, “You have to be Jewish....”)

- But there is a simpler, more mechanical, less romantic, less racial, and, I believe, truer explanation
- for why these poets can seem to resist translation.

Such poets can be considered those, for whom the local conventions of their poetry are so deeply embedded psychically

- that they seem to be second nature to them;
- in their hands the conventions no longer seem conventions,
- but simply a truth of the language, or
- of the particular poet’s psyche as it functions within the language.
- Goethe has a remark somewhere that few people realize that a poet’s most felicitous effects are often embedded in the rules of language itself,
- and we can extend this observation to the conventions of poetry that grow up in a linguistic community.
- It is the poet able to realize and utilize such conventions most effectively,
- who can seem the most inspired and gifted;
- what to others is learnt, and obviously so, seems to be what he has been given,
- his natural mental landscape, the ethos within which he luxuriates and flourishes.
- But because his poetry is by that fact an endlessly dense tissue of his language’s poetic conventions,
- he seems by virtue of his very skill to be monolingual, untransferable to a language and poetry,
- which does not share such conventions.

And this is why the poets, who seem to develop a poetry’s capabilities most tellingly

- who seem to their linguistic communities to be the most “poetic” of all,
- are often precisely those whom it is most difficult to bring over into another language.
- Certainly, in Persian literature, the example of Hafez,
- and of the numerous poor poet-translators, who metaphorically lie bleeding at his feet,
- would seem to bear this out.

Dick Davis is Professor of Persian and Chair of the Department of Near Eastern Languages and Cultures at Ohio State University. As author, translator, or editor, he has produced twenty-two books, including translations of two volumes of stories by Ferdowsi, as well as Ferdowsi's Legend of Seyavash (Penguin Classics). In addition to academic works, he has published translations from Italian (prose) and Persian (prose and verse) and numerous books of poetry.
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